The structure, direction, and organization of your essay is excellent. Your introduction smoothly leads the reader to your thesis statement, which specifically and accurately focuses on the meaning of the work that the author is trying to convey to the audience. Both of your body paragraphs do a nice job of reinforcing your position on the prompt and enhance your argument through pertinent pieces of evidence. I would recommend proofreading your essay to give a finishing touch by avoiding grammatical and spelling errors in you writing. If time permits, I would also recommend giving your thesis a different perspective by exploring this issue from a slightly different but still similar perspective. Overall, a great essay.
This essay is really good! I love how you organized it; the flow of the essay makes it so easy and interesting to read, and you don't get caught up in weird wording or sentence structure. I love your introduction as well! You started off broad and then narrowed the idea to exactly what you wanted to talk about. You do a great job of avoiding plot summary and don't have any pointless or "fluff" sentences that are there just to add length. Your essay is concise and to the point! You could consider revising your thesis slightly and leaving the techniques out of it. If you added tone and meaning to your thesis, you could structure you body paragraphs around that. The techniques would naturally come through when you provide examples!
Your introduction is perfect here. You make a specific thesis about techniques and the meaning they provide, while sticking to the prompt. A well selected novel as well. In the body of your essay, if you spent more time on analysis and specific examples instead of summary, this would be a really fantastic essay. Well done!
The structure, direction, and organization of your essay is excellent. Your introduction smoothly leads the reader to your thesis statement, which specifically and accurately focuses on the meaning of the work that the author is trying to convey to the audience. Both of your body paragraphs do a nice job of reinforcing your position on the prompt and enhance your argument through pertinent pieces of evidence. I would recommend proofreading your essay to give a finishing touch by avoiding grammatical and spelling errors in you writing. If time permits, I would also recommend giving your thesis a different perspective by exploring this issue from a slightly different but still similar perspective. Overall, a great essay.
ReplyDeleteThis essay is really good! I love how you organized it; the flow of the essay makes it so easy and interesting to read, and you don't get caught up in weird wording or sentence structure. I love your introduction as well! You started off broad and then narrowed the idea to exactly what you wanted to talk about. You do a great job of avoiding plot summary and don't have any pointless or "fluff" sentences that are there just to add length. Your essay is concise and to the point! You could consider revising your thesis slightly and leaving the techniques out of it. If you added tone and meaning to your thesis, you could structure you body paragraphs around that. The techniques would naturally come through when you provide examples!
ReplyDeleteYour introduction is perfect here. You make a specific thesis about techniques and the meaning they provide, while sticking to the prompt. A well selected novel as well. In the body of your essay, if you spent more time on analysis and specific examples instead of summary, this would be a really fantastic essay. Well done!
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