As a whole, your essay is well-written. I feel that it might be beneficial to expand on your thesis and give it greater specificity in order to more narrowly approach the prompt and portray your position. The first body paragraph is a little irrelevant as you do not explain how it relates to the ending and why it is significant. In all three of your body paragraphs, I would recommend including more scholarly analysis to more greatly explain the significance of the closure and how it relates to the intended meaning of the work as well the purpose of the author in setting up such an ending. What is the author's motive? Is it closely related to his intention for a theme he wishes to convey to the audience?
Great job on this essay! I haven't read The Kite Runner, but I've only heard good things about it. Your essay makes me want to read it more! You do a great job of providing examples and avoiding plot summary. Your introduction is good also, but you might want to structure your topic sentences a little bit more! Also, some grammatical errors are present, but there aren't many and they don't distract from your writing. Great job!
I think that this essay could have used some more concrete examples though, and been more clear in supporting a specific thesis. I recommend using specific details and techniques instead of the broad analysis that you have here. I really like your writing style though.
As a whole, your essay is well-written. I feel that it might be beneficial to expand on your thesis and give it greater specificity in order to more narrowly approach the prompt and portray your position. The first body paragraph is a little irrelevant as you do not explain how it relates to the ending and why it is significant. In all three of your body paragraphs, I would recommend including more scholarly analysis to more greatly explain the significance of the closure and how it relates to the intended meaning of the work as well the purpose of the author in setting up such an ending. What is the author's motive? Is it closely related to his intention for a theme he wishes to convey to the audience?
ReplyDeleteGreat job on this essay! I haven't read The Kite Runner, but I've only heard good things about it. Your essay makes me want to read it more! You do a great job of providing examples and avoiding plot summary. Your introduction is good also, but you might want to structure your topic sentences a little bit more! Also, some grammatical errors are present, but there aren't many and they don't distract from your writing. Great job!
ReplyDeleteI think that this essay could have used some more concrete examples though, and been more clear in supporting a specific thesis. I recommend using specific details and techniques instead of the broad analysis that you have here. I really like your writing style though.
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