goood workk! You made some great points and backed it with some good evidence. especially love how well you incorporated your voice into your writing. Good Work! maybe just elaborate on your paragraphs a little bit? Other then that great work.
Good essay, I think you could have used more to back up what you said. It seems to me that you just did a little bit of a summary as your evidence, not a more specific part to use as evidence. In all I think you at least need to have more in your paragraphs because that seemed a little short to make your point. I like the way you approached the prompt, though, the ideas of your essay were good.
goood workk! You made some great points and backed it with some good evidence. especially love how well you incorporated your voice into your writing. Good Work! maybe just elaborate on your paragraphs a little bit? Other then that great work.
ReplyDeleteGood essay, I think you could have used more to back up what you said. It seems to me that you just did a little bit of a summary as your evidence, not a more specific part to use as evidence. In all I think you at least need to have more in your paragraphs because that seemed a little short to make your point. I like the way you approached the prompt, though, the ideas of your essay were good.
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